Creative Writing, Blog X

In class we have been working on children story books. We have had to write our own. This is mine it is a real story - realistic fiction, it is about ... Well you will just have to read it to find out.  Keep in mind this is a draft and the end has not been edited what so ever.  Please read it out loud because it sounds better! Enjoy !!

One starry night, Nan, Ella and Pop were sitting in the lounge drinking cups of tea.  SLURP SLURP! But all of of a sudden they heard an almighty … CRASH and a CRACK. “Oh deary me, said Nan.  What on earth was that! Nan and Ella Sped down the hallway like a train on a track. Nan opened the door CREAK and saw the window was smashed.  “OH NO OH NO” She slammed the door in a flash. Her and Ella took a small step in, then in a flurry of feathers and whirl of wind, WHOOSH, and from out of the blue appeared Keke the Kereru SQUAWK SQUAWK. Ella squealed EEEEKKK Nan Screamed AHHHH and Keke Squawked SQUAAAWK. In a fright we slammed the door shut BANG.  We took a peek inside and he was perched on his but. “He sure is mighty big,” said Ella “It looks like he just ate 5 roast pigs!” “He must have broken the window by flying right through, “Yes I agree but what will we do with Keke the Kereru,” cried Nan. Ella and Nan told Pop the crazy story, and Pop replied with “Oh Good Glory,”   

Pop suddenly exclaimed “ I’ve got an idea,” Nan said “What is it i’m eager to hear.” Pop told us his magnificent plan and said off you go to the neighbor's house Ella and Nan.  So we told Martin and Gloria the big long story and they both yelled out “OH GOOD GLORY” We told them the plan while eating pikelets with jam. Now we know what to do, with Keke the Kereru!  Martin ran to his shed to grab his whitebait net and said Lets go catch mother natures naughty pet. But when Martin came in he tripped over the door mat and his face went Kersplat right into a puddle of Keke’s poo. How much more damage can that bird do,” cried Nan.  Martin groaned, Nan sobbed and Ella said I’ll get the mop. Together they all cleaned up this icky bird slop, and set off to catch this troublesome kereru. They searched high and low but Keke did not show, “Oh no where did he go,” cried Ella in dispair. They wandered over to Pop who was sitting in his chair.  “Pop, Pop we don’t know where the bird has gone!” But all of a sudden in a flurry of feathers and a whirl of wind out came Keke from behind the garbage bin. He flew onto the tippity top window sill and then let out a very chirp that was very shrill which made everyone cover their ears as if to say you can’t catch me when I’m up here. But they weren’t giving up that easy Martin ran over to the door and grabbed his whitebait net which had fallen on the floor.  “ I can get you easy peasy lemon squeezy,” He whispered so quietly no one could hear. But the bird must have heard so when he swung the whitebait net he flew under pop’s chair. How on earth can we get him out from under there, cried Pop “Never fear Ella is here,” said Ella and with that she coaxed the bird out from under Pop’s seat. And he just sat there in front of Pop’s feet. Quickly scoop him up before he swoops away again. Martin got him in the net and Ella said Nan, Pop can we keep him as pet.  No we have to set him free where should we put him? Maybe in the Kowhai tree said Martin! “Great Idea let's put him out there,” Nan said. We all said goodbye and let him fly into the kowhai tree.

I have decided not to put in the undedited end piece because it didn't make sense when I have altered the story!

What do you think of the story so far? COMMENTS!!!!!